Red Frog said:
Also, maybe a bosom or two.
Yeah, Froggy, it works if you want tea with your new aunt.
Lose the pillows, and the blankets. Superfluous. Remove all other distractions. Focus on the moment and the task at hand. Exchange "brisk Saturday morning in autumn" with "steamy-hot summer night." Replace gentle with "strong and menacing" and remove any "maybe" or other doubt.
Now we've got something.